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the piano man's clientele by SpinningStarshine the piano man's clientele by SpinningStarshine
EDIT: This spot is reserved for my biggest thanks to ^Halatia for the DD feature!, and to everyone else who has taken an interest. :blowkiss: Thank you!

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This poem can be read in three different orders.

:bulletpurple:Purple:bulletpurple:

The clientele
slipping in among the crowd
straight on "until"

Elaborate no further.
after 3 A.M., you couldn't more than keep
just sitting around and listening

for about three years, new arrivals
was all wrong
not brazen, not rhythmic
not, not

Their first uncertain year:
uncannily human shrieks and cries
inspired by wild expressiveness
the other sounds rise to a hectoring beauty
antic sounds, willfully absurd, seal the urgent message
chilling a funeral cortege with skeletons
if not by the force of law then by the force of the thugs.

:bulletorange: Orange :bulletorange:
How long the night went on:

Huddled on the stand, the handsome young piano player
a familiar number under one name or another
sweet, straight, "under conversation"
who blazed through town now and again
even if he couldn't let let go the promises of all he heard.

A three-minute drama
finds ease and release in manipulation of
an unexpected emotional punch
from Chopin's "Funeral March"
audience reactions
once mocking and dancing
his most extraordinary talent.

Together
The clientele
slipping in among the crowd
straight on "until"
elaborate no further
how long the night went on.

After 3 A.M., you couldn't;
huddled on the stand, the handsome young piano player.
More than keep a familiar number
just sitting around and listening.

Under one name or another, for about three years
new arrivals - sweet, straight, "under conversation"
was all wrong, not brazen, not rhythmic
not, not - who blazed through town now and then.

Their first uncertain year:
Uncannily human shrieks and cries inspired by wild expressiveness
even if he couldn't yet let go the promises
of all the other sounds he heard
(a three minute drama).

Rise to a hectoring beauty
Finds ease and release
in manipulation of antic sounds
an unexpected emotional punch:
from Chopin's "Funeral March", willfully absurd.

Seal the urgent message
audience reactions, once mocking and chilling
a funeral cortege with skeletons dancing
if not by force of law then by force of the thugs.

His most extraordinary talent.
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the piano man's clientele by *SpinningStarshine must have taken ages to map out. It is a clever twist on found poetry. ( Featured by Halatia )
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shyvampiress1997 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful. My favorite way is them together. :heart:
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Narcek Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011
Strange... But... I Love it...
Awesome!!
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you!
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Mistamie Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
this is truly amazing!
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you!
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Fire-Chan9490 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2011
This is so amazing. Seriously, it's beautiful. D:
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2011  Student General Artist
:heart: Thank you! I've missed doing these; can't wait to finish up my studies so I can resume.
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Elle-Oh-Elle Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2011
Found poetry isn't easy, and combining two poems into a cohesive single is nothing short of brilliant. Well done.
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you very much. =)
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cagedbird0215 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2011
"Uncannily human shrieks and cries inspired by wild expressiveness
even if he can't yet let go the promises
of all the other sounds he heard"

I love the way that sounds. <3
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Minor-Detail Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love the third one. It tells a story, and it just kind of... sits with you, I guess.
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jamie2413 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
This. Is. Amazing. ♥
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BurningRoseBud Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2011
nice the fact that you can read it in 3 ways and I like the strange feeling that gives
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Fartman51 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
I love how reading each one actually gives a different feel to it; the purple has a slightly melancholy tang to it, while the orange has a feel of splendor and wonder, but when they combine it makes the poem into even more of a story than the other two alone.

Seriously, this is awesome!
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you for the detailed description of the feeling(s) each poem gives you. :heart: I always am interested in what people come away with.
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ClockworkAardvark Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the orange best. <3
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student General Artist
Any favorite lines? = ) Or just how it all comes together as a whole?
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ClockworkAardvark Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Perhaps the third column. :)
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Starry-Anime Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011
this is amazing. it must have took forever to do this! i love how you took a couple words from a book, and made it into remarkable poetry.
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student General Artist
There's a whole group that showcases this kind of poetry , if you're ever interested in reading more from other artists. One piece might blow you away, but it's really incredible to see how different people approach found poetry. = )

Thank you!
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imjustme213 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011
That was beautiful, and very creative.
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olivatre Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is great, and must have taken so much effort! To be able to compose three different poems, seperate or overlapping, from simply two pages of The New Yorker is simply amazing work. A well-deserved DD! :love:
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student General Artist
Thanks for the enthusiastic comment, Tanekura! :hug:

I know it says right there on the bottom, but I appreciate you taking note that I used The New Yorker as my source material. I use it a lot - every week I read it and then have at it with a sharpie. ; )

PS: I looked at your gallery and LOVED it. You're quite talented; I wish I was one of those people who can write AND draw (AND color) -jealous jealous- :heart:
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olivatre Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No problem! :huggle:

Haha, the only reason why I would ever read the new yorker is to see the comics at the back xD I find them funny xD

Ps: Aww, thank you! Although I don't really excel in writing Dx :heart:
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2011  Student General Artist
Haha it's true. :XD: Although I read it cover to cover, I have a tendency to look at the last page before I start at the front.

Well, jeez. If you were super awesome at everything I'd ask you what your secret was. o_O ( ;p )
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ArizonaJackal Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I've never seen anything like that before! That's awesome, and brilliant. A well-deserved DD, I believe. Congrats c:
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you! ("Well deserved" -- the nicest thing to hear) :heart: I'm especially glad to see that this DD has been introducing found/blackout poetry to more people.
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ArizonaJackal Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah you're welcome. :) It's good to see some more variety, less known things being brought out.
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The-Seventh-Sage Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Professional Writer
I have never heard of this before. It's quite interesting. Thank you for this :).
Congratulations by the way :D!
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student General Artist
Happy to know that this piece introduced found/blackout poetry to you. =D Thank you.
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The-Seventh-Sage Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Professional Writer
You are very welcome :D.
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blondecrsity Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love how the two stories become one. So beautiful :heart:
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Toile-art Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Professional Filmographer
wooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooow
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student General Artist
=)
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Toile-art Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Professional Filmographer
nice poem and an even nicer smile :-)
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HappyStance Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011
I generally don't like found poems that much... But this is lovely.
Congrats on the DD.
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you! I'm happy that this piece is an exception to your rule. ; )
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Arlouette Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
I've never seen anything like this... (maybe I should open my eyes) and it is amazing.
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2011  Student General Artist
I'm glad that one my pieces got the honor of introducing you to an art form called found poetry or blackout poetry. There's a dA group that hosts a whole gallery of this sort of poetry: [link] I encourage you to look and even give it a try sometime. =)
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Arlouette Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Ohh cool. Thanks :3
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Hyoko-x3 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Student Digital Artist
cool ;)
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Yu-Xin Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow.
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spockezri Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011
Brilliant! :3
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DJDent Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Odd coincidence. As I was looking at this, the song "Piano Man" came on.
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2011  Student General Artist
That is excellent. 8-)
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JohnnyKurr Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011
What an awesome concept. ;u; I love the story too---it's fantastic all the different ways you can read it; a well deserved DD, congratulations. <3
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2011  Student General Artist
Thanks so much!
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QuantumPhysica Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
waw! this is idd pretty special...
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ShadowJetX Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2011
Very cool.

But not everyone has to read in those orders, I like to mix it up a bit an read different parts at different times, free style. You know what I mean.
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SpinningStarshine Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2011  Student General Artist
Yes, I know what you mean and I wholly encourage you to freestyle! :heart: The way I divided up the lines was simply a guideline for reading the poem(s); I tinkered around with the order a lot and I still do when I reread it. I'm pretty excited to know that you've taken advantage of the flexibility of found poetry.
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